Essay
by Marin Iskandar
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ASSIGNMENT_1.DOCX (17.18K)
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Essay
GRADEMARK REPORT
FINAL GRADE
GENERAL COMMENTS
30
Instructor
/60
Marin, I can see what you have tried to do but you
have not managed it. Your sentence structure,
grammar and spelling is very poor and you need
help in order to improve this for future assignments.
It was very difficult to make sense of your
assignment. You could have done more to address
ideologies – you have referenced Yar but could have
used him more in terms of addressing whether the
film takes a traditional or non traditional approach. Is
there an element of vigilantism in it? If so, you
needed to explore this further.
PAGE 1
Comment 1
you need to pay attention to punctuation and sentence structure, particularly when it is your
opening sentence
QM
Awk.
Awkward:
The expression or construction is cumbersome or difficult to read. Consider rewriting.
PAGE 2
QM
Sp.
Spelling error
QM
Sp.
Spelling error
QM
Improper Citation
Improper citation:
Improperly cited material. Please use the link below to find links to information regarding specific
citation styles: http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html
PAGE 3
Comment 2
This should be capitalised throughout the essay : The Call
Comment 3
what is changing? what point is the movie making? is it trying to tackle stereotypes?
PAGE 4
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RUBRIC: UNTITLED
QUESTION
P
HD
Accurate, comprehensive and articulate critical engagement with the assigned questions.
Analysis shows originality of thought.
D
Accurate and well articulated responses to the assigned questions which provide original
insights. Evidence of critical engagement.
C
Mostly adequate responses to the assigned questions. Some evidence of critical
engagement.
P
Some adequate responses, but with errors and little to no critical engagement.
F
Answers mostly wrong and fail to engage with the assigned questions.
RESEARCH
C
HD
Outstanding research and a sound grasp of the key theoretical and conceptual content to
emerge from the literature. Relevant and thoughtful integration of research.
D
Considerable research and effort. Displays an understanding of the key material.
Relevant integration of research.
C
Good attempt to research, but some inconsistencies in application.
P
Inadequate effort and research.
F
Little or no research and effort.
STRUCTURE
P
HD
Exceptional structure. Each point clearly links to the next and has a strong narrative flow.
D
Clear structure and strong narrative flow.
C
Logical structure.
P
Uneven structure with little thought to narrative flow.
F
Little/no structure.
EXPRESSION
F
HD
Professional standard of writing. Exceptional grammar and written expression. Very few
to no errors. Any errors are very minor in nature.
D
Excellent standard of writing. Very few to few errors with expression and grammar. Any
errors are minor in nature.
C
Good standard of writing. Argument is clear, but some minor errors with expression and
grammar.
P
Adequate standard of writing but some problems with expression and grammar. Some
argument unclear and poorly expressed.
F
Writing is difficult to read with major flaws with expression and grammar.
REFERENCING
P
HD
Professional standard of in-text citations and bibliography is flawless.
D
Excellent standard of in-text citations and bibliography. Very few errors and any errors
are very minor in nature.
C
Good standard of referencing, but some formatting errors.
P
A number of formatting errors both in-text and in the bibliography. Not all referencing
consistent with Harvard format.
F
Poor/no references. Does not follow Harvard referencing format.
